PROS:
→ A few solid ideas (like the anemia thing in the beginning).
→ Great opening.
CONS:
→ Cringe-worthy writing.
→ Hasn't been proofread/edited enough; too many grammatical errors.
→ Terrible at foreshadowing; Chekhov's gun much?
→ There were times when the thesaurus was abused and times when the thesaurus wasn't used enough.
→ Very little "showing" and too much "telling".
→ After page 13, the story dipped.
→ Poor character development; male protagonist is a moron.
→ Far too many useless minor characters.
→ Story was as bland as the characters.
→ Trying too hard at everything.
→ Was too obvious who the villain would be.
→ No chemistry between Greg and Lissianna.
→ Misogynistic, sexist, and objectifying.
→ Cringe-worthy dialogue.
COMMENTS (AKA WHY I HATED IT):
